Jim Murdoch's only haiku is titled
'The Faces of Men' -
how quickly
the light of the sun
diminishes
My haiku reply to Jim's haiku was titled
'Don't Question' -
without our books
of guidelines
where would we be
When I now read the two poems straight through, as if they were one, I see the two fitting easily together to form a poem of two verses. All the new poem requires is a fitting title. And to that purpose I've taken Jim's first line.
'How Quickly'
how quickly
the light of the sun
diminishes
without our books
of guidelines
where would we be
You misread what I wrote, Gwilliam. I said, “the shortest poem was a nine word haiku—my only haiku—written in 2008” but I like what you’ve done here, especially the combined version. For the record that 2008 haiku was:
ReplyDeletea haiku
floating in white space
a receding bird
Sorry about the 'misread', Jim. I'll leave it as it is as you like it. But I like the white bird one too. So that's here as you say for the record.
ReplyDeleteYour remarks about your party piece Fleas and your visual poem on your blog has got me scratching my head and wondering if I might compose a one word haiku. Mmm.