Tuesday, 9 December 2008

haiku moments (6)

This morning's gentle jog along a path of frosted leaves found another haiku waiting in the woods:

borzoi and greyhound
sniff at tree's base;
labrador waits with ball

And as for the pigs? Well, they were in their usual place again; and there was much excitement!

man at pigpen
with wheelbarrow
brings forth tailspinning squeals


The Weaver of Grass said...

Love the tailspinning squeals!!
Great minds think alike - I too have posted a haiku today. Sometimes they strike you suddenly when you are out walking don't they?

Poet in Residence said...

That's right. Also they are our 'hey, look at that' moments. And the haiku form is a good way to record and recall them.

Ackworth born said...

ouch - the man DOES NOT BRING squeals

he (or what he brings) may well EVOKE squeals

Poet in Residence said...

Thanks Gerald, I'd missed that. I must have forgotten to click 'save'
when I did the edit. Changed it now to how it's supposed to be. By the way, thanks for the photo of Hyde Utd FC.! Brought back lovely memories of rainy days at the famous sloping pitch in Canal Street, near 'The Bridge', in those good old Cheshire League days. Bangor City from Wales were also in the Cheshire Laeague! They got to a European quarter final against Naples I recall now.

Ackworth born said...

ah this much better but would be better still without "brings forth" - the words are redundant

man at pig pen
with a wheelbarrow
tailspinning squeals

there is a natural "cesura" (break) at the end of line 2 so no punctuation is required.